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Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#schools #time #subjects #history #people #skills #students #job
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It is a highly debatable subject to decide the mode of teaching in
schools
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. Some people believe that
history
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 must be prioritized in lectures, as
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 is how the
next
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generation
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 carries our legacy, while others think that trending
skills
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 must be adopted by
schools
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 in order to make youngsters ready for future inventions. I tend to that
schools
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 should be the primary basis for the young
generation
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 to learn the required modern
skills
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 before they enter into a fast-paced world. It is well known that we all live in the present. Though our roots are connected to
history
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, in the process of human evolution we always made progress in each
generation
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. It is convincing to accept that
history
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 has a great impact on our lifestyle and following our traditions, but, practically, it does not add any value to our progress in
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 competitive world.
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, being an Indian knowing about how technology is getting adopted by, United Kingdom governments give more insights than how British rule happened in India. We should always feed the
next
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generation
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 with the required
skills
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 and
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 how the progression mechanism works.
On the other hand
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, every invention that happened in the past was made by the availability of resources in each
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. If we were depending on historical conclusions, we could have ended up believing the earth is a flat surface. While living in the era of building shuttle rockets to space, it does not necessary to know about how the
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 aeroplane was made unless someone needs to look at the inspiration aspect.
History
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 must be treated as a knowledge source just to transfer some knowledge, but more focus should be given to trending
skills
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. In conclusion, we should consume some knowledge from
history
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 and perform more on current
skills
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.
Schools
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 and other training organizations must adapt and change their curriculum time to time.
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