Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

It is obvious that the married
couples
are delaying
to give
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birth. There are several
reason
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for
this
trend and the possible impacts on both family and society. The main cause of a tendency to be delayed childbirth is
the
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ridiculous inflation. It is no exaggeration to say that nurturing
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babies requests a lot of money.
However
, these days
couples
said that we are even getting harder to maintain
our
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lives.
Hence
, they have no choice but to postpone their own blessing.
Furthermore
, the married
couples
tend to give up
to have
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a baby
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baby
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and decide to enjoy their lives
such
as Yolo and DINK.
Although
there are no
couples
who do not want to bring infinite love to their child, they are willing to lay down the responsibility of taking care of their baby due to the unequal inflation.
This
trend can impact families and societies in several possible ways.
Firstly
, in the families, they are getting to harder to form a bond of sympathy between parents and
children
. Because new culture is made from younger people. Unless the parents can comprehend, the relationship
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estranged
each other
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.
Secondly
, the competitiveness of the societies is diminished more and more. Someone said that
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children
is
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the future of
country
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the country
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.
Besides
, the energy of
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is weaker than that of
children
. As
this
problem, the elder people will have to work over the retirement age.
This
being so, the
society
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development will be
more late
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. To sum up, there are
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reason
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reasons
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why people choose to have
children
later in life which can have both positive and negative impacts on families and societies.
Nevertheless
, it is expected that
this
problem can be solved by taking
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assistance from the government.
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