In many Countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many countries have prohibited smoking in public

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. So,

people

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who

smoke

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in public

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will be breaking the law and can go to

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jail. I think

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is a good

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from the governments of these countries

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because protect the life of

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who

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not

smoke

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. For the above, I agree with the statement.

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of all, we must know that the smog from the

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very dangerous for

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breathing around. In fact, some studies

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shown that even

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in outside's

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, can affect the

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around.

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, when someone is near

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somebody who is smoking, the effect of the smog in the lungs of both persons is the same. It is very dangerous

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stay near to someone smoking. Another point to consider is that

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restriction helps to reduce the number of persons who

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, improving the general health of

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society.

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, if adults who

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frecuently

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frequently

can not

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in some

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, they will reduce the number of

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cigarettes

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reduction, in long term,

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improve

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in their levels of health, and reduce their odds of

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lung's diseases. As you can see, there is a correlation between

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restriction and the health of a part of society For the reasons I explained before, I think is really good that

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not permit smoking in public

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. I agree with

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because are healthier for the entire population.

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Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

244 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

secondhand smoke
prevalence
respiratory issues
environmental pollution
litter
healthcare costs
smoking-induced illnesses
encourage smokers to quit
public health improvement
justified
public spaces
exposure
non-smokers
inconvenience
younger populations

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In many Countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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As a result of electronic invention such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent so you agree or disagree?

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