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Many teachers follow the practice of giving students task for home often based on lessons taught in class . It is often believed that such a practice should be stopped as it reduces time spend on leisure activities or nonacademic pursuits. Do you agree or disagree?

#teachers #practice #students #home #lessons #class #time #leisure #activities #nonacademic #pursuits
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In the midst of
this
 technology-driven global world,
academical
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 knowledge is important,
however
, which is not enough to succeed in life. Apparently, children should think
by
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 their own, as well as, they should do extracurricular activities. Most of the
teachers
 give
homeworks
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homework
for
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to
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 their
students
 based on the topic
what
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of what
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 they taught them the same day, here they
dont
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don't
 get a chance to think by themself, they just
omiting
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omitting
 what they learned from the class, but,
i
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I
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 strongly believe
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it is
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 a wrong thing that
teachers
 doing with their
kids
.
As a result
 of
this
 ,they are not getting enough time for entertainment or nonacademic
things
.
Therefore
,
teachers
 should stop doing so and
i
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I
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 support
to
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apply
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the same. Nowadays, Schools are having competitions between them, that which school is giving more works to their
kids
 as well as conducting more exams,
eventhough
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even though
, they know its are
nontolerable
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non tolerable
intolerable
 by the
students
.Admittedly, here
students
 are forced to study
things
 without their interest, due to
this
 we cant expect a good outcome from them. Ostensibly,
kids
 are working as machines from morning till night. They have to study not only from school
,
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 but
also
 from home. Here they are not getting their own time for doing the
things
, they want to do or they like to do. Tacitly, our new generation will
end-up
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 with depression, if the scenario goes like
this
. A recent study conducted in
U.S
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the U.S
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 based on
students
 found that those
students
 getting more
work load
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 from school are showing the symptoms of depression
in
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their
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 early age itself. Academical knowledge is essential only, for that we should not make our
kids
 as pressure
coocker
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cooker
.All
kids
 won't be brilliant as Newton ,
however
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 everyone
have
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 their own likes and dislikes. Someone will be more interested in sports, he or she may become a future
olymbian
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olympian
,
anotherone
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another one
 may have
interest
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an interest
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 in arts ,he or she can become
a
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 oscar winner, so
dont
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don't
 underestimate
kids
, same time
dont
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don't
 over expect from
kids
 they should do
things
 ,the way how you want. they are new generations , let them think and do what they want. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, Our
kids
 are
kids
,
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let
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 them enjoy their childhood.
Eventhough
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Even though
, they should get good academical knowledge, they
also
 have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to dream and try to achieve their dream in their own way with parents and
teachers
 support. Let them dream and fly.
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