In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

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I believe that
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should not
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. I think
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because
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need to concentrate on their education rather than spend their
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working and they should spend their
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as a child and do things that are appropriate for their age . One reason I believe
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because
children
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can not value their
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and how important school is for them.An adolescent could easily be distracted which can be harmful to their grades.
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,
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who
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can not concentrate on the homework they have given in school ,
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instead
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they go to
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and forgot about their homework . Another reason that
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should not
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is that
children
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need to take advantage of their free
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to discover what are they passionate about . In ,addition to knowing what they truly like , they have the
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to develop and grow their talent .
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, after he finished his homework , he could paint ,dance or read and
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what I really think
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have to do. In conclusion , there are a lot of activities which
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can do but not one of them should lead to
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have to
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.The most important thing they act like a child ,not an adult.
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