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Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town. Do the advantages of learning a new language in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Learning a brand new
language
 may be challenging. While many people would choose to study in their own country, some people choose to travel abroad to help with their studies. Several factors are affecting the success of
such
 a play. The disadvantages of doing a
language
 course overseas are significant.
Firstly
, it is a matter of finances thanks to living in an exceedingly foreign country may cost many fees like tuition, accommodation, food, drink, etc.
However
, there aren't many of us
which
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 will afford
this
.
additionally
, living
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far away
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faraway
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far away
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 from family, friends and being
during
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in
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 a new culture could make learners feel lonely and isolated which impacts their psychological state and their studies.
Nevertheless
, these issues can generally be resolved. If all costs are too expensive you can get a part-time job which helps you solve money problems and having to use your new skills daily practice makes perfect, and, when everyone around you is chatting in their native tongue, you'll be getting involved and keeping up in no time,
moreover
, should you work, you will miss family. and at
last
, you'll be able to understand a distinct culture. Knowing
the
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linguistic communication is maybe the most effective thanks to
have
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 a richer, more personal experience with the native cultures. the foremost effective thanks to
communicate
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 with an area person in their own country is in their linguistic communication. In conclusion, while studying a new
language
 abroad might have some challenges
such
 as financial problems, cultural differences, or feel lonely. Though, many difficulties can be overcome.
Therefore
, I believe travel abroad to learn a new
language
 is a good idea for you.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic immersion
  • Cultural integration
  • International network
  • Conversational proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Pedagogical differences
  • Culture shock
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