In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction, causing high levels of water and air pollution. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

The current urbanization and industrialisation
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a greater impact on the atmosphere and on
water
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by making them completely polluted. In
this
essay, I shall discuss the causes of
this
problem and
also
the preventive measures that can be taken. To start with, one of the major reasons
of
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air pollution is
due to
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the high percentage of undesirable gases in the atmosphere
such
as sulphur dioxide and carbon monoxide.
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, let's consider the plastics that come out from the industries. As they are made from oil and as the process of extracting and turning it to plastic is carbon-intense, it
doesnot
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does not
doesn't
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nature, which leads to
carbon-emissions
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. These can
also
cause respiratory problems for people staying near or around.
Similarly
, the waste that comes from these buildings is going directly to the rivers.
This
way the
water
is getting depleted and
also
it is a serious threat to the
acquatic
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aquatic
animals living in it. The solutions to these issues are,
firstly
, to reduce plastic and increase the efficiency of
equipments
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and invest in renewable energy.
Besides
,
to
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treat the
water
in different stages, before releasing them into ponds. To
also
, start
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water
harvesting.
Lastly
, To keep fossil fuels grounded. All the countries need to move their economies from fossil fuels as soon as possible. I conclude
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telling that, we are only purely responsible for the damage of our
mother land
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.
Hence
, the government should pass strict laws discussed above and should make sure the industries and the constructions sites follow them at any cost.
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