The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a big number of markets which are offering its products

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the internet. In consequence, many

customer

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customers

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have migrated to buy some

product

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products

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in online shopping, but there is a part of

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the customer

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customer

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customers

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that continue going to the physical

stores

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. It is

disagee

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disagree

that online store will lead to all

stores

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towns

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closing.

Analize

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Analyze

the importance of

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experience

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the experience

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of shopping, as well as the

necesity

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necessity

of assistance to buy some kinds of product, may

helps

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us to understand why

stores

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towns

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will not close.

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, a great number of consumers buy things because they enjoy the

experience

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of going to the physical shop.

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, Apple's

stores

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offer

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their clients a great

experience

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to its clients, let them the

oportunity

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opportunity

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interact with all the devices that they sell in the store.

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experience

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can not be offered by online shopping, just might

be achieve

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in physical

stores

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. For that, shops in cities will not be closed as a consequence of online shopping

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, the

adquisition

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acquisition

of many things need

the

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support from experts to understand which product will

helps

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us.

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, when a client

need

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tools to repair their homes, they need all the materials to do the task, but they

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need an explanation of how the tools and materials must be used. Even if we

recieve

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receive

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assistance

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the internet, I think the support will not be the same if we talk face to face with the expert.

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, companies will maintain opened

stores

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towns

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, so those will not be replaced by online shopping. In

sumary

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summary

, in some markets, factors as the

experience

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of buy and the

needess

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needs

need

needless

of support to know the products will help to maintain

opened

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the

stores

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towns

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. It

is disagree

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with the statement that Online shopping will lead to all physical

shop

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shops

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closing. In the future, the companies

maybe

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will offer both

kind

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stores

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

324 words

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The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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