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The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
There is a big number of markets which are offering its products
by
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 the internet. In consequence, many
customer
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customers
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 have migrated to buy some
product
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products
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 in online shopping, but there is a part of
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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 that continue going to the physical
stores
. It is
disagee
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disagree
 that online store will lead to all
stores
 in
towns
 closing.
Analize
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Analyze
 the importance of
experience
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the experience
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 of shopping, as well as the
necesity
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necessity
 of assistance to buy some kinds of product, may
helps
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 us to understand why
stores
 in
towns
 will not close.
First
, a great number of consumers buy things because they enjoy the
experience
 of going to the physical shop.
For instance
, Apple's
stores
 offer
to
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their clients a great
experience
 to its clients, let them the
oportunity
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opportunity
of
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 interact with all the devices that they sell in the store.
This
experience
 can not be offered by online shopping, just might
be achieve
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 in physical
stores
. For that, shops in cities will not be closed as a consequence of online shopping
Second
, the
adquisition
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acquisition
 of many things need
the
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apply
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support from experts to understand which product will
helps
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help
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 us.
For example
, when a client
need
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needs
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 tools to repair their homes, they need all the materials to do the task, but they
also
 need an explanation of how the tools and materials must be used. Even if we
recieve
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receive
this
 assistance
by
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on
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 the internet, I think the support will not be the same if we talk face to face with the expert.
As a result
, companies will maintain opened
stores
 in
towns
, so those will not be replaced by online shopping. In
sumary
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summary
, in some markets, factors as the
experience
 of buy and the
needess
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needs
need
needless
 of support to know the products will help to maintain
opened
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open
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 the
stores
 in
towns
. It
is disagree
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disagrees
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 with the statement that Online shopping will lead to all physical
shop
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shops
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 closing. In the future, the companies
maybe
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may be
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 will offer both
kind
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kinds
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 of
stores
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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