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some people think that planting trees is open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses.to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Trees
 are important and evidently plays an excellent part
for
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 the survival of
human
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 race. A plethora of people belives to plant
trees
 in urban areas, I completely agree with them, I would like to illustrates the different reasons behind the plantation of
trees
 in cities in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, A multitude of
trees
 will help to prevent pollution among the urban areas as Pollution is a prevalent problem due to the use of
large
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 number of vehicles. Human beings
aslo
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also
 have certain numbers of respiratory
dieseas
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disease
diseases
such
 as Asthma and COPD. More
trees
 will produce
the
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more oxygen in the environment and will
helps
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 to increase the quality of air in the towns.
Moreover
,
Trees
 will
also
 provide a mesmerizing outlook to
city
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. It will help to attract
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tourists. Tourism will help to boost the economy of the urban area.
In addition
 to that, Cities does require a number of places for exercise, playing games and walking.
Trees
 can contribute to
develop
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 beautiful parks, playgrounds and walkways around the cities for humankind. It will encourage the citizens of
city
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 to live a healthy lifestyle. People can bring their family members and children to these beautiful places in the fresh air which will
also
 help to build a strong bond
in
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between the family members. To recapitalized, I would like to conclude that
Trees
 should be implanted in the urban area for the growth of cit and to promote
the
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healthy living standards for the population of the city.
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