Some people think that public health is a responsibility of the government.while others believe that individuals should be responsible for their own health. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is generally considered that
health
is the most prominent factor for every individual. Many masses ponder that authority is responsible for people's
health
, whereas, others believe that it is the responsibility of
individual
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to be healthy. I shall highlight all my points
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further
subsequently
. To commence with,
regime
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is responsible for public
health
.
For instance
, by preventing them from doing things that are harmful,
such
as an
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overconsumption
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over consumption
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of junk food and the lack of exercise.
firstly
,authorities can invest the money through
awareness
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campaign
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and medical treatments in case of severe
health
conditions.
Secondly
,
the
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another wonderful way of local's
health
is that government should open
the
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free gym and training
centers
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in all rural and urban areas.
This
may be helpful for citizens to have a better lifestyle by using these amenities. On the flip side, people are
also
responsible for their own
health
. They should do more and more exercise and avoid unhealthy meal which is not good for their
health
.
Moreover
, it is
also
the responsibility of the parents to inform their children about
health
issues. So they care
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themselves. Apart from it, critics should avoid
to take
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drugs
such
as smoking and alcohol because it has detrimental effects which ruin
the
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health
. To recapitulate, both government and individuals are responsible for public
health
.
Regime
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can impose
rule
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rules
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and regulations and masses take care of their
health
by eating
healthy
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a healthy
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meal
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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