Some feel governments, rather than private companies, should be in charge of medical services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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medical system, certain thoughts were brought about, one of which is a belief that governments ought to be
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for health care
instead
of private companies. I strongly disagree with that perspective and in
this
essay, I will support my view.
To begin
with, one reason why I believe a private sector is better for
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system is
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each customer chooses what kind of
service
they want. To explain, a country where there is a free market for trading any
service
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nature, tends to be more technologically developed.
Additionally
, once
people
pay for a
service
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better quality and
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well-structured customer
service
.
People
are free to choose what they are buying. It might vary from their needs, age, money and once
this
request or necessity exists, more companies will prepare themselves to offer what
people
want. Another important argument that supports my view is that governments ought to occupy with others matters that any other citizen can do,
such
as social organisation. Each country needs an organ to assure that
people
’s living conditions are reasonable. It is to focus on order and law respect.
Consequently
, they can positively provide to any citizen an equal life condition. If they occupy with other regards
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complete medical assistance to everyone equally, they will overload themselves with certain responsibilities which could
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to private companies. In conclusion, I totally disagree with the argument that governments need to provide medical assistance to citizens
instead
of private enterprises. It is from private consumerism that all technological services are developed and with
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system is not different.
Besides
that, each government must work to provide the same life standards to every
people
,
nonetheless
, they need to wisely select who is in real need of full support.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental human right
  • equitable access
  • government-run healthcare
  • economies of scale
  • negotiate
  • healthcare costs
  • profit motives
  • compromised healthcare
  • health inequities
  • accountable
  • public health objectives
  • reinvest
  • infrastructure
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