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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is argued ed that one of the big
problems
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 of
people
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 that living in the capital is
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traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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. Nowadays numerous
people
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 have a dream to stay with a comfortable life and many facilities in a big
city
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. Leading to
people
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 prefer to stay in a large
city
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 especially, in
inner
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citycity
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city city
.
This
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 essay will focus on discussion about causes of
traffic
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congestion
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 and ways to solve the
traffic
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problems
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 in a large
city
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.
To begin
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 with causes of
traffic
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congestion
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.
Firstly
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, the location of
companies
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 and
organizations
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 is one of the most important
traffic
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problems
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. Numerous
companies
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 and
organizations
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 are almost located in inner-
city
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 for more convenient
transportation
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.
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, jobs are usually in the
city
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 lead to
dense
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 population
in
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there. The population is the most important factor that directly affects the
transportation
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system
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 both private and public transportations. Two big
problems
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 result in heavy
traffic
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congestion
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 especially, during rush hour. Many
people
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 are stuck on the road at the same time because of the working hour that starts and gets off simultaneously.
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, other factors are poor
transportation
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system
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 and the high
cost
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 of
transportation
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 that cause many
people
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 to choose to use private cars more than public
transportation
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. Another with suggestions about resolve
traffic
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 problem.
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, the government should control the number of
companies
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 and
organizations
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 located in the
city
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.
Companies
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 and
organizations
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 should move to the local areas.
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, it not only decreases
traffic
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problems
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 but
also
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 promotes the distribution of prosperity to the region.
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, the distribution of prosperity to the region can reduce
traffic
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problems
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 and can
also
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 distribute income into the rural.
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, if the countryside has higher work demand, workers will migrate to find jobs.
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, the government should produce and control
transportation
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 systems for both qualitative service and price.
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, if a better
transportation
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system
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, good service and low
transportation
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cost
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,
people
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 will more consume public
transportation
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. In conclusion,
traffic
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 jam is a big problem that affects the quality of
people
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 life in metropolis especially, on a rush hour. The main causes lead to
traffic
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congestion
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 including clusters of
companies
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, densely folks, poor public
transportation
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 and pricey
transportation
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cost
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. Better ways to reduce
traffic
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congestion
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 in a large
city
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 include more distribution of
companies
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 to the local area and improve about
transportation
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system
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 and
cost
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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