Some people think they it would be better for large companies and industry move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantage?

Some individuals are
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the opinion that renowned factories to be moved to rural
areas
away from town centres.
This
has both negative and positive impacts. On one hand,migration of large companies to rural has got negative effects because of various reasons.
Firstly
,it would pose a threat to
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environment because of the emissions from the factories which pollute the environment and later have effects on individuals.
Secondly
, the poor waste disposal systems in the rural regions meaning
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of the waste will be dumped improperly because they lack municipal waste disposal
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systems in
the rural
areas
.
For example
,
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of acidic drainage on river Kuja following crude dumping from the nearby timber factory.
Therefore
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of industries in the rural village not only have negative effects on humans but
also
on the environment.
On the contrary
,if the factories are left in the rural
areas
they provide a stable source of income to the locals which will improve their livelihood.
In addition
, the availability of companies in the rural will improve the local infrastructures and lift the
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level.To illustrate
this
, roads build and
electricity
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installation will be put in place
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to promote
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industrial activities as well as
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nearby
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households
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house holds
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.
For example
,Nyahera village enjoyed improved roads owing to the nearby factory.
Thus
local
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enjoy
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the use of utilities. Conclusively, availability of companies in the rural
areas
has a great negative impact on the individual and
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therefore
they should remain within the city centres.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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