Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country's health budget a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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The given diagram provides information about the development of Indigo
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during the years 1990 to 2010. Overall, it can be depicted that in the former year, the area of the indigo
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and garden was small, which was expanded in the latter years with the new purchase of land. As can be seen in the diagram, a new amphitheatre was constructed between the period of 1992 to 1994 near to the
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it can be seen that the establishment of the amphitheatre took longest as compared to other amenities, during the same period the area was expanded with the purchase of two other lands. In the year 1995, an orchard was built on the upper right
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of the
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a pond and a vegetable garden were established near to the amphitheatre and on the southern
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of the orchard respectively.
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grown on the north
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and the south
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near the orchard and vegetable ground respectively, they were
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grown near the swimming pool which was constructed between 2006 to 2007.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • health education
  • public awareness
  • proactive approach
  • unsustainable
  • economic productivity
  • healthcare system
  • vaccinations
  • curative measures
  • comprehensive healthcare
  • financial burden
  • incidence
  • preventable diseases
  • eradicating
  • controlling
  • allocated
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