The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
illustation
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illustration
presents the number of overseas
students
and local
students
that enrolled in Australian universities
since
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2001 to 2010.
To begin
with, in 2001 there were less than 20,000 international
students
enrolled in Australian universities. The number of internal
students
increased
continously
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continuously
since
then
. The biggest increment was in 2019 with 40,000
students
compared to 2020 with approximately only around 30,000
students
. The highest peak was 40,000
students
in 2010.
On the other hand
, the number of local
students
were
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was
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always merrier than the
internal
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students
. The trend of enrollment of local
students
was unsteady. As we could see the highest trend was in 2002 for all
the
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time. We
also
could see a significant increase from 190,000
students
to 210,000 from 2001 to 2002.
However
, the trend showed
droped
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dropped
slightly every year from 2020 to 2006. From 2006 to 2008, we could see a
moderately
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increase
of
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in
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local
students
.
However
, it started to drop again
until
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in
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2010.
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