In many countries traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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In
this
era of technology and globalization, all spheres of life have changed dramatically and food
is also
no exception. I agree that international fast foods
and restaurants have eaten up traditional foods
and cuisines and this
has had a detrimental effect on families and societies. A number of arguments surround my opinion. There are a lot of damaging effects on families. Firstly
in this
torrid pace of life, people
are working till their death. They have no time to prepare and enjoy traditional home cooked
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home-cooked
food
. Ultimately, they switch to an
easy option of restaurants. Correct article usage
the
McDonalds
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Mcdonald's
Mcdonalds'
have
become a ubiquitous term in every home. Change the verb form
has
Secondly
, there is the influence of occidental
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Occidental
culture
over the oriental one. People
are forgetting their roots. For example
, in earlier times all family members used to sit together and eat, and over the dining table
they shared their happenings of the day. These fast Add a comma
table,
foods
are eaten alone mostly because they don't appeal to the palate of the older members. As a result
, family bonds and relationships are getting blurred. Moreover
, the art of home cooking is suffering a lot. Admittedly, this
trend has harmful effects on individuals. Undoubtedly, people
are affected by health hazards like obesity and other diseases
. Obesity is the root cause of many other diseases
. Fast foods
are rich in fats and salts which are not good for health. An obese person is more likely to suffer from diseases
like hypertension and diabetes. There are tangible consequences on
society too. Broadly speaking, as Change preposition
for
people
get inclined towards fast food
and restaurants, local culture
dies out. It is because traditional food
is inextricably linked with culture
. Undoubtedly, the identity of the society and nation will disappear. It will be monopolized by western
societies. Capitalize word
Western
Also
, if people
are not healthy, the productivity of the nation will come to a standstill. Last
but not least, fast foods
promote use — and — throw culture
, which adds to the problem of garbage dumps, contamination, pollution and eventually many diseases
. To summarise, it can be reiterated that international fast foods
have carved their niche and traditional food
has taken the backseat. Certainly, this
has adverse effects on individuals, families and societies.Submitted by nitsam3 on
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