The internet has transformed lives and economies bit it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Advent and invigoration of the internet
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affected significantly
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changes
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lifestyles, economical developments and many others. Now that
people
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have communication
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at
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and anywhere, it is universal to experience
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the same
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trends
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and
cultures
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throughout the
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.
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, there are concerns regarding what if the whole
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ends up sharing a single
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. In my opinion,
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people
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will enjoy and follow the same
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, it is less likely to happen each and every person will think and act the same. It is undeniable that there are
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boundaries between
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owing to the fact that the internet has given
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the capacity of interacting
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with other
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sides of the
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and
share
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their
cultures
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,
people
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can listen to the same music, wear the same style
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,
furthermore
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celebrate and sorrow at the same events.
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to say,
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share
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the same
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,
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,
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the
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new
culture
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that
golbally
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globally
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shared, and it has nothing to do with mitigating
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ethnic
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of each
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countries
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.
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,
people
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enjoy international food
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to time, but that does not mean that
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stop eating their own food.
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it is true to some extent that
people
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think and behave
similarly
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,
however
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,
that is
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absolute excessive
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generation
generalization
. In fact, there are many
people
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, perhaps more than the number of
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who
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other
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culture
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cultures
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and follow the
world
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trends
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, who lives in their home country and
culture
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for their lifetimes. Particularly, for non-English speaking
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countries
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they have
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opportunities to experience other
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culture
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cultures
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as much as English speaking
countires
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countries
do.
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, it is too soon to say that the whole
world
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will have one
culture
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. In conclusion, it seems plausible to worry about losing
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distinctive
cultures
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of each
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countries
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and
share
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the same
trends
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all over the
world
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as it is already happening in some international cities or who are interested in global
trends
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. Yet there might be one same
culture
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that the
world
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share
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together, there still be traditional
cultures
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remain to every
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countries
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country
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