Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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seems to trigger a considerable debate. A cluster of
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voice that playing
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it and opine that
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games
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put an adverse effect on
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view claim that nowadays , electronic
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are very famous with youngsters as well as online
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online so they will be more productive as compared to before as well as they can think smartly and they use their brain more .
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like they can
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, if they play online
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they can make new
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friends
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, many an individual does not follow suit and opine that
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of
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increasing
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in between every age group .
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of their lives
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playing
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it usher in more problems in public
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, be it
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mentally
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to play
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so they can not eat properly if they may not take care of their health so in those situations health hazards can come due to
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put cast an adverse impact on their
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.
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, spending more
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on
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create a big
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. To elaborate
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, they might
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on their study and they can not put
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and academic performance will be poor .
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,
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proven to
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for society
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because
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time consuming
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people
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always glued to with
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they would not be able to do best in their
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. At
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, it can be summed up that no doubt
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have some advantage in
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, but it is logical to assume that
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are very harmful
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because
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dump
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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