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the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer.

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The given graphs show the
electricity
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demand
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 in England
in
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on
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 a typical
day
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 of
winter
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 and
summer
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 and
also
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 show how people used
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electricity
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. According to the
first
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 line graph, we can see that the
electricity
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demand
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 in
winter
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 is much higher than the
demand
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 in
summer
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 in England.
In
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 a typical
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, the
electricity
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demand
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winter
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the winter
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 season is around 35000 units and it is around 18000 units in the
summer
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 season. Again the
demand
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 for
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electricity
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 varies on several hours of the
day
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 and the
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from
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 6:00 to 9:00 am is lesser than the
demand
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 in other hours of the
day
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. During the
winter
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 the
demand
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 is highest from 21:00 to 23:00 and during
summer
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 the
demand
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 is highest from 13:00 to 14:00 hours. Based on the pie chart we can infer that the room heating and water heating is the main purpose people consume the
electricity
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 in England. The
demand
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 for washing machine, kettle and ovens consume around 18% of total
electricity
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 consumed and two other categories consume 15%
electricity
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 each. These two other categories which consume 30% of total
electricity
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 include light, TV, Radio, vacuum cleaner, food mixer and other electric told and devices.
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