Some people think that because children find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

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It is true that many school subjects are
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difficult

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for students. While some
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student
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students

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tend
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to love learning math and philosophy, I would have to support the idea that courses should be optional. On the one hand, Many students have
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different
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mental
level
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levels

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in primary schools.
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Therefore

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,
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prefer

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that subjects be
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choosable

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In the
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six years of school, that will
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increase

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love learning and
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ability

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at
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student
students

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because
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no
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compulsory
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to study any subject can not understand it.
However
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,
studing
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studying

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mathematic and philosophy can
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up the brain and mental skills but
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student
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the student
a student

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can not learn and get
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benefit
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from
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anything

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did not like it or did not want.
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, there have many ways and
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professional

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places

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to learn math but stile
student
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can not understand that because there did not want. In
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conclusion

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, even though that many school
courses
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is
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to
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teach

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in the schools for students but I believe that learning subject should be
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by the
student
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because
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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