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Many parents are concerned about the violent computer games or movies or leisure activities. How can this impact children ? What can be done to solve this problem?.

#parents #computer #games #movies #leisure #activities #impact #children
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have
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 a bright side and a dark side even humanity have an angel and a demon side.
One
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 the other hand, Any item in
this
 life you can use it
by
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good
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 way and bad way.
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 the knife can be used for cocking and make
a nice food
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nice food
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,
on the other hand
, it can be used
for
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 kill people and make disaster for
other family
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another family
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 so
it's depend
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 on
user
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the user
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. The power of video
games
 is incredible. there are many kinds of
games
 and there are so
meny
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many
 benefits you can get from
games
. there
is
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are
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games
 called school play .It's a mix of teaching and
give
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 fun time for children. other
games
 called focusing
game
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games
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 help kids to
focuse
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focus
in
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specifica
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specific
part
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parts
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 of
fun
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the fun
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 and make
thiar
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this
that
their
a fingers
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fingers
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more
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faster. Some
games
 give
a
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teenager some
challanges
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challenges
 and they have to pass through
challange
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challenges
 to get
reward
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the reward
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.
this
is grow
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 up the
the
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hard work and not give up
for
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horriable
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horrible
 work. all these
games
 target
adulecent
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adolescent
 not adult
players
 but there are so many
games
coutain
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contain
violent
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violence
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, drugs and even
sexuel
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sexual
containt
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content
. Why do
games
 contain
this
types
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type
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 of
a
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horrible part? Because these
types
 of
games
aimming
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aiming
adulat
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adult
players
 which
is
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are
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 called +18
players
bussnis
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business
. It's not for
a
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kids,
on the other hand
, so many parents
they
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don't check which
types
 of
games
thair
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their
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childrent
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children
 have? All parents most
to
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check the
games
 before bought from
shop
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the shop
a shop
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 and give
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
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 to
thair
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their
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 children about
games
. Summary.there are so many kinds of
games
 . each play
aimming
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aiming
 specific age and
types
 of
players
.so parents have to check
games
 before bought to thair children.
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