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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Most
people
 believe that
music
 can bring humans from different cultures and range of ages. In my personal view, I personally agree because of these three major reasons which will be examined.
Firstly
, it is apparent that most
of
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people
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the people
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 in the world love listening to
music
, because sounds from
music
affect
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 to
happiness
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the happiness
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 of someone listen to them. As the result, when
people
 feel comfortable
from
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listening to
music
, they will not be nervous,
therefore
, it will be easier to
communicating
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 with
another
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people
 from other cultures.
Furthermore
,
people
 who love listening to the same kind of song with each
others
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, from
this
 point,
people
 will start to communicate with each
others
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 that
causes
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 by sounds.
In addition
, we will see that there have been many concerts or
cerebrations
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 happened for many past of years, they have brought
people
 from several countries together.
Hence
, there will be new interactions from joining the concerts.
For example
,
Big
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 mountain
music
 festival is one the biggest concerts in Thailand,
this
 concert interests many
people
 from any part of Thailand,
therefore
, they will be together in
this
 place,
that is
 the cause of new relationships
will
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be happened
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. To conclude. I personally believe that
music
 has
a
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 potential to bring
people
 from different cultures and ages together. When
people
 love the same things to each
others
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, they will have an interaction which will make new relationships of
people
 over the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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