Many young people regularly change their jobs over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, interchanging jobs has become the trend in our youth generation from recent years and has sparked much debate on
this
issue. In my point of view, I want to state that replacing
work
is a bad idea and I am completely against
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it. In
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will discuss both merits and demerits with relevant examples. To commence with, they are few benefits of
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switching your
job
. The primary profit is you can luckily get new team members to
work
who understand well and assist you in myriad ways when you face hurdles in your projects or meetings.
For instance
, One of my
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suffered in her
job
in terms of partiality and rash
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as well as she is to not get any moral and any other support from seniors which makes her life miserable
then
she decided and changed her
job
to
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reputated company where she got
friendly
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environment and supportive team members and encourage her to succeed in her
work
targets.
Thus
, sometimes switching
job
is good when
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are facing
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.
Additionally
, by
canging
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changing
job
you can get high salary
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to
last
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pay you got from other company
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Because due to the experience you gain you can be confident enough to ask and demand
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higher pay. To illustrate,
myself
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worked as a high school teacher in a residential high school but my pay was so average compare to my
work
.
Moreover
, taking bitter experience I joined
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a other
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school where I demanded
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salary that
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my life easier as a higher class representative
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my abilities with
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic workplace
  • job-hopping
  • job opportunities
  • technological advancements
  • job market
  • job satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • higher salaries
  • career progression
  • diverse skill set
  • work cultures
  • professional asset
  • stability
  • commitment
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