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Computer today can quickly and accurately languages . therefore, it is a save the time . To what extent do you agree or not ?

#computer #languages #save #time
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However
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pons
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 and cons of
this
 aspect , it is irrefutable to say there are a lot of advantages if people are using a computer for learning new
languages
 . So I perceive that I agree with the statements and I hereby give the following arguments to support myself . Commencing with a first and foremost point in the list of my knowledge is that today
the
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life
an
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and
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 people have faster everyone wants to learn new
languages
 . When
this
 technology came
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 human life
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they
can
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 learn
easily
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new
skills
 with the help of computers.
For instance
 , In the past
time
 , they could not get new
skills
 because they had learned few
languages
 and they were
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 of
time
 as
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 to day life
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 is very fast so it saves
time
 they can learn new
skills
 anytime and anywhere and
also
 one more benefits they do not need pay fees for learning new
skills
 .
In addition
 to
this
 , if they learn new
languages
then
 , they can not face any problems
such
 as if they go to any other countries like Canada , Australia , India so on they can easily visit there and they can talk easily without any problems and they can understand their region .
Thus
 , It is very useful for learning foreign
languages
 with the help of computers.
On the other hand
 , there are some disadvantages of learning foreign
languages
 with the help of new technology because they have learned only practical
skills
 and they can not feel
this
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languagelanguages
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language languages
.
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time
, they were learning
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a
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new
skills
 with
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help
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 of books and they
had taken
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 classes and they could easily
languages
 with cheap money as
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to computers
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computers
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 because it is very expensive . Everyone can not buy it . So , it
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full
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 book After analyzing the matter , it would be right to say that despite a few disadvantages, many advantages offer rank higher .
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coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates a limited logical structure, with ideas presented in a disorganized manner. Clear topic sentences and transitions would greatly improve the coherence of your essay.
task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the task, but lacks depth and originality in its response. Ensure that your arguments are well-developed and specific examples are relevant to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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