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Band 2.5

Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
the
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wealth is a
vital
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vitally
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 essential part
in
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of
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 human life. All items are purchased by the
wealth
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wealthy
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 mainly,
electical
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electrical
 devices, surgery,
groccery
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grocery
 foods, etc. For
this
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 statement, I strongly
agrred
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agreed
agree
 with
this
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 as
society
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a society
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 assume to think about purchasing expensive products.
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a
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variable reasons and arguments with appropriate examples. The foremost argument is that middle people always need to think when they are going to shop
wealthy
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for wealthy
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 mobile
phone
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phones
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.
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, not all
electical
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electrical
device
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devices
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 are cheaped as others can afford.
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, all
apple
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Apple
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 devices are made for
bussiness
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business
person
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people
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 so, cheap people can not afford
it
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them
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.
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, some
layman
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laymen
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 think
twicely
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twice
 to buy or order the lovable products from the shopping mall.
Howerer
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However
, it will not
overtook
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otherside
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other side
 too, others believe that needless items can
purchased
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be purchased
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by
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directly. Add to
this
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, as they
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think
thinked
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thought
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 that if the older can spend their money anywhere as they want. For
instances
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instance
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, according to Media Z, the
porshe
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Porshe
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 person never look
their
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at their
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 financial statement, they just do buy a
lamborgini
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Lamborghini
Lamborgini
 car.
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, the choices for buying products never should be equalled. In conclusion, the crucial aspect of
the
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shopping is
a
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 price and, it will consider that the product ought to buy or ignore. From my perspective, I would prefer to buy affordable and qualitative items as I need and want.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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