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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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Nowadays, technology penetrates
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every corner of modern life :
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, education and even pleasures. So, many people consider video
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 as inoffensive fun or as a useful education tool. In my opinion, I accept their positive effects on the users.
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, I believe that they are more likely to have a harmful impact. On the one hand, video
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 can be both entertaining and educational. Gamers discover the joys, the interesting things through the characters of these
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 it reduces stress after a day at school. From an educational perspective, to achieve victory, players are urged to make thinking and actions work together in extreme concentration. At the limit of victory and failure, one must make decisions as quickly and as intelligently as possible.
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, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks.
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 of all, it is easy to be addicted to these
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. To illustrate, many people enjoy playing
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 to the point they neglect their jobs.
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, they forget to have regular meals or eat fast food without nutrition.
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, playing
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 for many hours causes health problems
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 as eye pain, obesity. In conclusion, two aspects of video
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 are undeniable. In my view, people
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 to be conscious of these significant dangers.
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