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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. While others will argue
in contrast
 to that. And
that is
 because there are both kinds of
people
 in
this
 world, some are parochial, not ready to
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adopt
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 to new
changes
 while others are liberal. In
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 I will discuss both sides. In my opinion, I firmly believe that new cultural
differences
 should be welcome by
host
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 country.
To begin
 with, welcoming new customs are the means through which the world can experience innovation and
changes
.
People
 who are ready to
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adopt
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 to
changes
 are broadminded. There are an ample amount of benefits of welcoming new cultural
differences
.
For instance
, it gives an opportunity to
people
 to know about the contrasting traditions and heritages of different countries. It is a great way of educating and enlightening ourselves with knowledge. It opens
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 window to broaden our
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.
On the contrary
, there are
people
 who are conservative and are
therefore
 afraid to welcome new cultural
differences
.
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 the old generation despite their efforts to learn new traditions, they are not able to fully accept the cultural
differences
. And
that is
 because they had been following certain customs for the majority of their lives so adopting to new heritages seem frightening and difficult. To conclude, like the two sides of a coin there are both kinds of
people
, some parochial and some liberal. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the perspective that host countries should welcome new cultural
differences
 as
changes
 are good and with time we all should change.
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