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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. While others will argue
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 to that. And
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 because there are both kinds of
people
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 in
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 world, some are parochial, not ready to
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adopt
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 to new
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 while others are liberal. In
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 I will discuss both sides. In my opinion, I firmly believe that new cultural
differences
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 should be welcome by
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 country.
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 with, welcoming new customs are the means through which the world can experience innovation and
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People
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 who are ready to
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adopt
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 to
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 are broadminded. There are an ample amount of benefits of welcoming new cultural
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, it gives an opportunity to
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 to know about the contrasting traditions and heritages of different countries. It is a great way of educating and enlightening ourselves with knowledge. It opens
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 window to broaden our
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, there are
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 who are conservative and are
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 afraid to welcome new cultural
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.
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 the old generation despite their efforts to learn new traditions, they are not able to fully accept the cultural
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. And
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 because they had been following certain customs for the majority of their lives so adopting to new heritages seem frightening and difficult. To conclude, like the two sides of a coin there are both kinds of
people
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, some parochial and some liberal. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the perspective that host countries should welcome new cultural
differences
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 as
changes
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 are good and with time we all should change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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