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The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Tourism
 has been considered as one of the most influential Industries for some time now. Some would prefer to look at the glass half-full, others mostly sit
down size
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 to it. In my opinion,
although
tourism
 and its problems, it
also
 provides countries with opportunities that are
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more beneficial. Every industry has its own negative impacts and
traveling
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 is no exception. If we look closely, we can see how mass is
traveling
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 around the world could affect countries in a negative way.
First
, there is the issue with pollution. It has been estimated that more than 60% of aerial trips are for leisure. So it is safe to assume that they played a huge role in polluting the air, it's the negative environmental impacts.
Secondly
, in today's Global Village ethnic cultures and languages are subside. In another sense, they are being replaced by
a more generally accepted ones
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. It should not come as a shark if in a few years, all those unscathed locations that receive around the world, would diminish. On the bright side, the industry offers a lot of perks and benefits. Countries that do not have
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 natural
resource
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 (name the oil, gold,
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.) Can definitely rely on
tourism
 and
source
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 of income.
This
 way both the government and people can enjoy some
stantial
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substantial
 monetary gains by attracting visitors to their country. The more prosperous the government
, the
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 more they can spend on infrastructure and green improvements.
As a result
,
this
 Society will experience a Better Living standard. In conclusion, I believe oil
tourism
 could prove detrimental in
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 of ways,
its
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 blessing for surpasses its
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