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Some people say History is one of the most important subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Did you enjoy studying
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 in high
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? To some
people
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,
History
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 lesson was one of their nightmares in high
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, to the extent that they would prefer subject like
Science
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 and
Technology
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, claiming these would be more useful.
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, the argument of which of the above subjects is more important has arisen. In my opinion, despite the fact that learning from
science
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 and
technology
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 is critical to
students
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, I assert that the importance of
History
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 outweighs that of
Science
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 and
Technology
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.
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 with, there is no doubt how vital it is to learn well in
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 and
Technology
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. As one of the major subjects in
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,
Science
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 and
Technology
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 is the steppingstone to many important fields,
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 as Engineering and Medicine.
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,
students
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 equipped with
further
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 knowledge in these subjects are more popular in the job market, so It would greatly enhance
students
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' career development.
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, many
students
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 view
Science
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 and
Technology
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 as the most crucial subject in
school
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, rather than
History
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. Be that as it may, scientific knowledge doesn't teach
students
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 everything about the
world
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. Whilst
science
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 tells them about the mechanism of the
world
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,
History
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 teaches them about humanity. The
world
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 has been shaped by
people
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 who know about the past and have the ability to change the course of the future.
For example
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, Abraham Lincoln loved reading the story of Exodus in the Bible,
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 it gave him the idea of liberating black
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 in his nation; Sun
Yat Sen
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, the founder of
Republic
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the Republic
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 of China, who was
also
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 a learned historian, overthrew the Qing Dynasty after reading five thousand years of Chinese
History
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 and learning the idea about Three
People
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's Principles.
History
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 helps
people
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 to avoid the mistakes of the past generations and gives them revolutionary ideas about the future. Some commentators argue that some figures that changed the
world
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 were scientists too, and
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 the value of studying
science
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 remains vital. I agree with the advantages and benefits given by
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.
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, the advancement in
technology
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 is not necessarily positive. To clarify, Einstein, who discovered the usage of nuclear power, regretted his discovery despite the convenience (
connivence
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connivance
) provided by nuclear power. It was because his discovery led the
world
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 to enter an era of massive weapons of destruction, making the extinction of humans possible.
History
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 may not be
students
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'
favorite
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 subject, but the wisdom that
history
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 provides is more important than that of
science
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. In conclusion,
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 and
Technology
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has
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 its limitations despite the significance it carries. It would be wise if
people
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 could learn from the past so that mankind may evolve to a better future.
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