Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. Why do they think so? What can be done to change their views?

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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. And
that is
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because of various reasons but mostly for the reason that when tourists visit a country they show defiance towards
that nations customs and traditions
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the customs and traditions of that nation
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and promote their own western cultures which
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bad effects on the mindset of that nation's population. In
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essay, I will discuss the perspectives of people as to why they consider foreign travel a bad thing and
also
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the solution that can change their views. In my opinion, I believe international tourism is important for a state.
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with, there are reasons that caused many folks to consider
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travel as a bad thing for their country.
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, travellers
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their
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customs and
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folks of that state to
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follow those cultures. Resulting in, their own heritages
to disappear
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in the process.
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, these globetrotters act defiant towards rules and regulations in entering a sacrilegious place.
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,
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entering a holy place one needs to take off shoes,
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their
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and
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properly but these backpackers do not seem to care about those rules. And
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, they cause pollution by throwing plastic bottles and bags everywhere.
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, foreign travellers are important for a nation as
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provides
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opportunity to learn about
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western customs and broaden our horizons.
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, the perspective needs to change and that can be done with some aid from the government.
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, the government can issue laws like
while
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going inside a sacred place everyone needs to follow rules and whoever
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not must pay a heavy fine.
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, fines for causing pollution and placing more trash cans around the city.
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, like the two sides of a
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there are both advantages and disadvantages to a certain thing. To enjoy the benefits we must find ways to change the downfalls into advantages. As mentioned earlier in
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essay, I hold the view that foreign globetrotters are important for the bright opportunities that
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along with
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them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental impact
  • Over-tourism
  • Pollution
  • Natural habitats
  • Cultural erosion
  • Economic dependency
  • Resource strain
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Eco-friendly practices
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Diversification
  • Empowerment
  • Awareness programs
  • Visitor limits
  • Off-peak tourism
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