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As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

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 modern era, the difference between
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’s social behaviour and that of
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 is a topic of public interest and concern. While I believe that the way
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 change their behaviour is a good development, I am
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 for the idea that
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 is a negative development. On the one hand, as
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 get older, they change their awareness of everything.
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, before doing anything,
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adults
 will usually think and analyze in order to achieve an effective result.
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,
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 always work by their instinct whereas
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 always think carefully
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 everything.
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, the kids play with their friends for fun while the
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 probably strike up a friendship with others in order to achieve their purpose.
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,
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 should counsel young people in order for them to gain a thorough understanding of life.
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, it is shown that
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 are more honest than
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. Most young
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 express themselves in a far more open and natural way than
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, showing extremes of delight and suffering. Meanwhile, because
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adults
 individuals usually want to hide their actual emotions, it can be difficult to understand what they are thinking and feeling.
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 people should behave skillfully in some situations, no one wants to live in a society where they cannot be the truth in others. In conclusion,
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's behaviour will change with time;
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,
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 is natural and has both advantages and disadvantages.
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