Each year, the crime rate increases. What do you think are the causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Crime is a common problem in many countries around the world. I would like to explore some of the reasons for

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modern phenomenon and offer some possible solutions to deal with

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issue. I believe that two of the main reasons why crime occurs is because poverty has increased in modern cities.

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of all, the cost of living in cities is expensive for poor people like the food, the house rent, and the education cost. One result of

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is that some people will

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supermarkets for food or other necessities they need to feed their families.The

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reason is

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not have a decent job with a salary they will choose the wrong path to earn money.

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, some

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will end up working

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illegal just to get money. The best way to tackle

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issue is that the government should put strict rules and regulations, especially in criminal zones to prevent

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crimes as selling illegal products.

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, The crime rate in Saudi Arabia is 5% compared to The USA whose rate is 20% due to the strict rules the government puts against criminals.

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, the authorities should give more job opportunities to the poor people so that every person could at least earn money for their living

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, the poor would not be compelled to commit crimes to

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their basic needs.

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crimes

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certainly very common, perhaps the above-mentioned ideas could help solve or at least alleviate the problem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

254 words

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Each year, the crime rate increases. What do you think are the causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

An organisation has given an advertisement for part time volunteering job for local children. Write a letter to the administrator of the organisation in your letter introduce yourself Why you think you are suitable for this. Job State when you will be able to join

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.