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Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem such measures cause?

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It is evident that the area
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 must use for making
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 production is wider than the requirement of crop manufacture. Because of the reduction of land in recent years, it is believed that
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 should reduce the expenditure
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.
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 essay suggests some methods for decreasing the
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 consumption of
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. Because
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 includes a huge amount of essential nutrition for humans
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 as protein, fat or vitamin, to reduce the
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, scientists and governments should research and invent some mixed products, which are full of important ingredients for humans. These products can provide
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 with the nutrition that they need.
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,
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 can gain many nutritious nourishments without eating
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,
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, the consumption of
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 can be decreased. The other way to encourage
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 to reduce the amount of
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 their daily menu is by clarifying the benefits of vegetables and fruits in order to encourage
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 to eat these alternative foods.
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, now there are some organizations of scientists and inspirational
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 come to many countries to advise
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 to be vegetarians.
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, there are some challenges and disadvantages of these methods. About the idea of manufacturing some mixed food which
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 necessary ingredients for humans, unfortunately,
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 method requires much money, including the cost for modern equipment, workers or many other categories. Regarding the
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 way to reduce the consumption of
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, for many
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, vegetables are much less delicious than
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, so they find
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difficulties
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 to adapt to the meal for a vegetarian.
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, in some countries,
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 have several traditional events that enquire nourishments from
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.
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, in Vietnam, on Lunar New Year, a chicken on the family altar is essential. In conclusion, now the amount of
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 consumed
everyday
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is overate
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is overeaten
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, which leads to many problems in the land for manufacturing;
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 reducing the expenditure
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meat
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 is really necessary. There are some methods for
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 mission,
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, it
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 has a variety of disadvantages related to finance or culture,
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 governments and scientists must research more and effort to solve these problems

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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