Some people are of the opinion that we must discontinue using fossil fuels and adopt renewable sources of energy. Yet others feel that renewable sources of energy are not as dependable as fossil fuels. Discuss both views.

Society has a mixed view on utilizing natural
resources
as a key source of power. One part believes that it is not a prudent approach to continue the usage of depleting
resources
, whereas the other one is in
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of it, as they consider
this
as a reliable source.
Firstly
, we will discuss the benefits of renewable sources of energy and
secondly
, we will explain how natural
resources
have an edge over the other ones.
To
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with, in recent years, citizens are facing
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of breathing issues because of the poor air quality, which is being caused by burning
non renewable
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sources like coal etc; to produce electricity.
This
is not only reducing the quantum of fuel
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but
also
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of
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.
For example
, almost every vehicle consumes fuel to operate, which contaminates the air.
However
, an electric engine vehicle saves running
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as well as emits zero pollution.
Therefore
, replacing these man-made methods with
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natural ones can surely prevent the nation from catastrophic effects.
On the other hand
,
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of temporary
source
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of energy could lead to extinction, which is not the case in nature given reserves.
Furthermore
, both methods yield
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end product.
In addition
to
this
, sustainable
resources
are abundant as well as easily available like sun, water etc; which makes it more dependable.
Additionally
, its
equipments
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can be installed at a nominal cost and various nations have started opting for it. To illustrate, government offices in my country are adopting sustainable modes, by installing solar panels on the rooftop.
Thus
, it is evident that substituting fossils usage with renewable ones will be a win-win situation and can be relied
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completely
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. To recapitulate,
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number of countries have stopped using limited
resources
and are adopting alternative ways to produce energy, whereas, few with hefty
resources
are still dependent on it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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