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Smoking is not only harm to smoker but also those who are near by.Therefore smoking should banned in public places. To what extend do you agree or disagree

#harm #smoker #places
Smoking is one of the leading
cause
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causes
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 of respiratory diseases. The negative impacts of smoking are known to both users and
non- users
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. I completely agree with the notion that
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 of cigarettes in common rooms should be restricted.
To begin
 with, there are enormous
health
 hazards linked to smoking and the most common among these is lung cancer. The chemicals released in smoke are carbon monoxide, nicotine and so on which are injurious to
health
.when these chemicals are inhaled it degenerates the efficient lung tissue involved in breathing and oxygen transportation
theough
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through
 blood resulting in breathlessness and other problems.
However
, secondary smoke is considered to be equally dangerous as fog released by
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a smoker
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smoker
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smokers
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 is inhaled causing
same
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health related
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 problems
which
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 occur in a smoker. Why should a non-smoker suffer because of
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habbits
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habits
 of another person so
its
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is
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 the government's responsibility to
bann
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ban
 smoking in public areas
.
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Furthermore
, special smoking areas should be made in public places
such
 as hotel lobbies,
workplace
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workplaces
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 and so on ensuring proper ventilation.
This
 will protect the
health
 of
commom
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common
 people. To sum up,
i
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 completely agree that strict action should be taken against people who smoke in public places.
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