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Languages are dying out all the time. The result of this is a world with fewer languages. This is a good thing for people everywhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are thousands of
languages
 in the
world
 today. Some of them are strong
languages
 spoken by many millions of
people
, while others are spoken by smaller groups of
people
, sometimes numbering in the hundreds. As
languages
 die, benefits accrue to human society, but
also
 drawbacks. It is certainly not advantageous for everybody everywhere. From a practical point of view, having fewer
languages
 can lead to greater ease of communication.
This
 is because when
people
 share a
language
,
then
 information and ideas can flow more easily, which is of utmost importance in a globalised
world
.
In addition
, there is an economic advantage, or economies of scale, since information can be presented in written form in greater bulk, meaning there is no need for translations, which can be costly.
Thus
, internationally, the flow of ideas and information is facilitated through the common
language
. There is another side, though.
First
 of all, those who have lost a
language
 have
also
 lost
a
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culture, a
way
 of expressing themselves, and a
way
 of understanding the
world
 and their experience of the
world
. They will never be able to express themselves fully in their new
language
.
Secondly
, the quality of communication in the common
language
 is limited. The reason for
this
 is that
people
 are writing and reading in an acquired
language
, not the mother tongue.
Also
,
this
 acquired
language
 may simply be unable to express some of the culturally bound ideas of the non-native speaker. In brief,
then
,
language
 death is a tragedy. Those whose
language
 todies lose part of their identity, and a
way
 to give expression to their deep thoughts and feelings. For the rest of the
world
, there is a loss of diversity. Along with the
language
, a whole culture and
way
 of expressing
this
 culture die. Things of deep human value that could be expressed before are now silenced.
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