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It is a widely held belief that leaders are born. On the other hand, people believe that leadership can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Genes pre-birth design our influential traits, I do not believe that these can not be cultured post-birth, in fact, 'great leaders are made, not born' is a widely accepted statement in the whole world, after we got 2/3rd head who attained effective administrative qualities from
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 world after they were born.
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, we will discuss how these attributes can be achieved, during the whole journey,
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, will explain how pre-assumed born ruler could easily get converted into dictators.
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 with, since childhood, teenagers start developing these skills, say, a book-worm monitor often guided by a teacher to effectively handle the class in his absence is a part of mastering these skills. in corporates, regular leadership sessions being arranged by the CEO's to convert bosses into chief, indeed, these are effective. To illustrate, Shobendu was labelled as my 'team leader' in TCS, whereas, he was chief only because he never listened to our submissions, but after the leadership lectures of Sandeep Maheshwari, his opinion got totally changed,
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, he started considering our advice in all the core areas.
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, ace leading quality can certainly be developed at every stage of life.
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, few blessed infants, with little extra qualities are considered to be god-gifted plus societies blindly start following them, which in turn, after attaining the majority, misutilize their powers, which becomes a dreadful situation for the whole region.
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, Shankar Singh was considered to be the lord's successor, as he uttered 'god' as his
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 word, but from his 20's, he started a movement to separate his state from the nation, and
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 it ended with violence and his death.
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, genetically superior can not guarantee sure shot leadership, rather than, can sometimes lead to rulership. To recapitulate, in a mother's womb, chromosomes only define our body structure, whereas, positive authoritative qualities, we can only accomplish from the outside world only.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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