Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies or interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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it is frequently seen that organizations are asking for various
details
. It is not clear for applicants
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as
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why those
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are required.
Thus
, one group feel
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relevant while
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its
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redundant.
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views
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and will explain why it is crucial to collect them. On the one hand, it is seen that though companies take
such
details
.
However
, they do not engage with people beneficially by using them.
For example
, I observed multiple times, that in spite of providing all the facts, the interviewers are enquiring me about my marital status to ensure if I will be capable
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up the crucial
reponsibilities
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responsibilities
that they are expecting.
Hence
, these questions make
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believe that filling a detailed form prior to
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does not make sense as nobody takes the effort to read it.
Conversely
, there are enterprises
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travel that extra mile to create a beneficial relationship with the candidate.
Hence
, the panel remembers every minute
details
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,as well as start their discussion by keeping these points in mind.
In addition
to that, even if the person
doesnot
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does not
doesn't
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time, they use
such
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to maintain a bond.
For instance
, I was offered a job from a well known MNC, that I could not join due to
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emergency.
Nevertheless
, even today, they share emails with me that contain valuable insights about the firm which are essential and interesting.
Besides
that, they
also
wish me
on
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my
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birthday. Henceforth; I believe they are trying to create a
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bonding with every
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whom they are interviewing. To conclude, in my opinion, filling up a form is a tedious process and do consume a considerable amount of time.
Therefore
, it is of immense importance that the employers make proper use of all these particulars that they have collected from a potential employee which makes them feel that their precious hours are not wasted. I am of the opinion that these
details
are crucial to create an impactful long-term association.
Submitted by abhinaba.de on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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