nowadays people waste a lot of food that was brought from restaurants and shops.why do you think people waste food?what can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

A section of
people
states that more number of fitness
facilities
should be installed to improve peoples
health
. but others deny
this
point and says that sports
facilities
doesn't
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give much impact to improve
health
and they
suggests
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that new ways
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should
be discovered.
This
essay agrees that there should be some other precautions should be required for
health
improvement. On the one hand, it says that public
health
can be increased by opening several activity
centures
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centuries
centres
and yoga classes. Nowadays
people
are becoming
more and more lazy
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to perform their daily day works,
This
leads to decrease in their
health
and fitness levels. To stop
this
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people
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should
be encouraged to actively participate in some programs, which makes improvement in their
health
,
For example
,
people
in western countries are very busy
in
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thier
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their
the
weekdays, but when they get to
weekend
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all of them practice some games or workouts with other fellow mates, which gives them mobility to
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work
for
next
week.
On the other hand
, some
people
states
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that the activities contribution is very limited to their
health
and they need some more actions to solve
this
. Though weekend exercises benefit at that instant,
but
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in a long
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this
cannot help them to get full energy. Another point is that more than physical activities, peoples food habits should change and they should follow some strict diet plans to be healthy. For
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, Scientists suggests that more than increasing sports
facilities
, the government should implement some helpful methods that
people
can
easly
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easily
folow
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follow
to stay energetic. In conclusion, though there are many benefits in increasing of sports
facilities
, some
people
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those are not enough, they suggest that eating habits of
people
should change to come out of these problems.
However
, I believe that
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regular
excersies
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exercises
exercise
and proper food habits can give ultimate benefits to
the
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society.
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