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Nowadays people can buy a large variety of household goods more than ever before in most countries in the world.what is the cause of it?Is it a good or bad development?Give your opinion and examples.

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It has become more apparent that
people
 can now purchase a myriad of household
goods
 worldwide than ever before. There are several reasons for that where two of the most
importants
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important
 are: an easy assess to online shopping and a wider collection of merchandise. I believe that
this
 is a welcome development, which I will try to outline below.  Nowadays,
people
 are no longer content with daily basic necessities. Not only
they
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do they
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 want to buy a beautiful house but they
also
 like to purchase expensive
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furniture
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
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 and other household
goods
.  Online shopping has made it rather efficient as well as effortless to review different shopping websites worldwide in order to review and compare different household
goods
 and associated prices. 
For instance
, the
welknown
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well-known
shoppingcentre
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shopping centre
, IKEA, offers almost everything a home requires, and on top of it, there is
different
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 variety and qualities to choose from. Apart from online shopping being effortless, it provides wider clusters of merchandise which
was
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 not possible prior to
Internet
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the Internet
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.
This
 gives
people
to
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apply
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an
apportunity
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opportunity
 to select their
favourate
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favourite
 items from different places with comparatively preferable prices, and it is quite plausible that
people
 would want to different variety of items
for
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to
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make
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making
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 their house look standout.
For example
,
instead
 of buying some
goods
 locally,
people
 would rather order their items
such
 as sofa or beddings from Italy or another country from Europe because of their quality and brand as well as
reputation
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the reputation
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 the certain company has
such
 as BoConcept from Denmark. In conclusion, purchasing a large variety of merchandise has become a common activity in
this
 contemporary society worldwide.
Although
 it can be argued by some
people
 whether it is necessary or in fact rather a waste of money, I believe that
people
 should have a choice to choose and purchase the exact item they desire without any limits.
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