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Water resources around the world are failing deficient. Analyse the possible reasons and provide you suggestions

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In recent years, great attention has been paid to the topic of
water
 sufficiency. The possible reason would be
water
 wastage mainly from the industrial sector.
This
 essay outlines the reasons and solutions to overcome
water
 shortage problems in the world.
Firstly
,
i
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 truly believe there is a lack of awareness in our society to save
water
 for our future generations.
In addition
, manufacturing companies have evolved in almost every part of the world taking up most of the
water
 supply for their own benefit. There is no proper recycling system created to prevent
water
 wastage in huge amounts. Every child needs to be educated since young about the importance of
water
 in our life and how we can save them. There are many ways to save
water
, we can simply start by saving
rain
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water
. Recycling
rain
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water
 could reduce
water
 wastage.
For example
, you could use the
water
 for car washing and watering indoor plants, etc. We can possibly save a lot of
water
 by practising
rain
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water
 harvesting, Introduction of
rain
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water
 harvesting will be huge benefits all of us including industrial sectors. In conclusion, creating awareness is the most possible and effective way to prevent
water
 deficiency around the world .
Water
 is essential for
life
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 with no substitute. We should educate each other to prevent
water
shortage
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 for upcoming generations.
Water
 is the most precious resource on earth. Save
water
.
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