WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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society, natural gas and

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are in short supply,

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people

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tend to invest money to search for more

resources

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, many investments should be made in improving new power plants. To a certain degree, I partially concur with

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notion and that the reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

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, owing to its' rapid increase in consumption of

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, it becomes really hard for

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to find

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to provide

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whole nation.

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, rather than focusing on searching for

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scarce

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that take ages,

people

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should consider using other providers

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wind

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turbines and solar generators.

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wind

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can never be in a shortage so it makes it much

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easier and convenient to rely on. Nowadays, some houses use

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abundant source like solar energy to supply electricity to the entire place.

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, it's a waste of time and effort looking for scarce

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will eventually be gone on earth one day.

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, it can

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be debated that

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is the essential source of power that plays a major role in our daily lives. Without

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, vehicles,

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, automobiles and buses that massively rely on the former resource will be affected.

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there are electric cars, they are extremely expensive in comparison to

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fuel-consumed cars. Other fossil fuels

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wind

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and solar are merely used by the population as it is expensive.

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wind

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is not always available and requires a forecast to know its speed and

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for

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solar energy,

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is only available in

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the daytime

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people

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will definitely face difficulty during

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when using these

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. To sum up, every

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have its own benefits and drawbacks. In

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situation, the population can

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equally

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both the

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and development of other energy sources.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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306 words

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