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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place.

#people #home #workplace #place
Neatness is one of the main
quality
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 most of us are thought in our childhood. Keeping our
house
 and workplace neat with the proper organization of
things
 is being considered an important practice and often encouraged.
This
 essay shall explore
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why it is vital to be organized, maintain neatness and how
this
behavior
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 can improve one's life.
Firstly
, most of us face difficulty in finding the
things
 at our
house
 if everything is messy and not organized.
For example
,
last
 week I had a meeting with an important client, and I got almost late
to
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 the meeting for not finding my car keys. Most of us return home for finding peacefulness and if our
house
 is scattered with everything and not neat, it would make us feel more stressed rather than providing relaxation. Investing some time over the weekend for cleaning the
house
 and organizing
things
 can help us progress more productively and make our
house
better
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 place to enjoy and relax.
Secondly
, at
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the office
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office
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 most of us are already multi-tasking with hundreds of
things
 running across our
mind
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minds
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. In
this
 case, it is very important to have
things
 sorted as it will save
lot
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 of time and energy.
For example
, in my
company
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 most of us work in open cabinets, with people coming over
each
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 other's
desk
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desks
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 to have
discussion
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a discussion
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. In
this
case
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 having
desk
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a desk
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 which is neat and
things
 all right places will not only create a good impression but will
also
 help you have everything handy paying attention to the discussion.
Also
 organizing
things
 in advance before leaving office, will encourage our mind to start the
next
 day feeling more positive.
This
 essay has discussed how can one approach
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handling home and workplace clean and being organized. As per my opinion, I definitely agree with
idea
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the idea
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 of managing
house
, workplace neat and organized as it provides more peacefulness and a better impression among others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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