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Nowadays parents are sending their children on trips abroad for educational purposes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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, education is one of the most essential figures in peoples' lives,
therefore
, many students were approved to pursue
thier
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their
 education outside the boundary for a better opportunity and life
skill
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.
On the other hand
, some people believe there
also
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 some drawbacks
from
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 studying abroad.In
this
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benifits
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benefits
 and
drawsbacks
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drawbacks
studying
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of studying
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 in
an international countries
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international countries
an international country
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.
To begin
 with, some parents believe that their kids will
thive
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thrive
have
 in a wider range of
skill
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skills
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becuase
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because
 they are in
the
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 multi-national environment, so they may have more connections and learn to cope with the diversity by themselves.
Therefore
, living in different
contries
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countries
 allows them to
enchance
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enhance
 their living skill.
For instance
, I had a chance to attend a Cultural Exchanged program in the United States, I
experiencd
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experienced
 a culture shock during my stay,
thus
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 need to learn the differences and put more
attemp
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attempt
 to understand the diversity.
On the contrary
, pupils
capable
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 to experience some disadvantages from staying in a different country as well
becuase
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because
 they are from diverse backgrounds and
somethimes
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sometimes
 they may
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of
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curtural
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cultural
culture
 knowledge so it could lead
a
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culture shock issue.One of the most obvious examples is
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the racism
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 issue in America; plenty of
asians
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Asians
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 were discriminated
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against and
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racisted
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racist
 by the
americans
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Americans
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 just because of
the
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 external
appearence
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appearance
, which resulted in aggressive actions
occured
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occurred
.
Therefore
, students need to handle the risks by themselves and difficult to get
assited
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assisted
. In conclusion, children will reap the benefits of studying abroad by getting wider ranges of their skill-set
such
 as
ability
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 to cope with the
diffrences
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differences
difference
.
Wheareas
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, there
also
 a vivid negative live in
different
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 country as they may face some culture shock issue.
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