Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many

people

argue that working in the same organization is a good idea but there is

also

a belief that working in divergent

organizations

is greater. The question is which environments are better? In my opinion, there are many benefits to having from working for different

organizations

To begin

with,

people

working in similar

organizations

usually achieve

stability

. According to

lots

people

, they said that when choosing a

job

stability

always comes

first

which means they don’t have to worry much about their future. They can take care of their family

lots

more but still have a particular salary and

moreover

, they can be experts at the field that they are working on, compared with having a

job

in different

companies

, you cannot be proficient at any field because you only

experience

it and do not tend to gain

stability

. ,

Also

the amount of money that you receive will fluctuate. Consider me, around 1 year, I have changed the various type of jobs,

this

problem will lead to the fact that I will be so exhausted because I don’t actually gain any particular amount of salaries on average year so that my life will be more unpredictable or struggled/ unsure because the amount of money that I get are fluctuate.

Nevertheless

, while

stability

is gained by working for one company, working for many

companies

will give

people

experience

in their careers. Experienced, for me, is really great things understand, what it means is that

first

of all, the feeling that when you work and find out from many

organizations

is so valuable because you can meet various kinds of

people

, experienced

lots

of working

style

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and

as a result

, you can fathom more about soft-skill and how to choose your suitable working environment. Let take my sister as a typical example, she is now 24 years old and has started working for 2 years, before she got the

job

as a Graphic designer she had experienced more than 20

companies

and achieved

lots

of experienced,

finally

after 1 year constantly change jobs she chose to work in a company call MDA because she realized that

this

company makes she pleasure and comfortable in working. She told me that the way that she was curious about each environment was so complicated. At

first

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she felt totally great with it but gradually the feeling has gone, but after she again wants to discover another. So it was so funny to involvement. What’s more is that I have known that before choosing a stable

job

, you should

experience

it early.

Experience

is a good thing to do

first

because you can understand the many diverse systems of those systems. In summary, I completely follow the idea that it is great to work in various

companies

because when you discover it

first

you can easily choose what your stable jobs are in the future.

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