Sugary drinks should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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that have

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proportion of

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are immensely popular in all ages.

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, a segment of society opines that high charges should be imposed on the products to discourage the consumption of

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. I disagree with the aforementioned statement for the following reasons. The

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and foremost reason is that elevating the price

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sugary

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is not the effective solution

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consumption; people especially toddlers are very fond of sweeteners like candies,

slurrpies

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slurries

and other fruits juices which are packed in plastic bags.

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, the inflation in charges might increase another financial burden on parents;

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, folks should be informed

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side effects of high intake of

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on health. To illustrate, the populace who intakes high

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in their daily routine might face

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disorders like obesity and diabetes and

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chronic diseases resulting in degeneration of crucial body parts.

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, a

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campaign

should be started by the government to make the public acknowledge regarding serious outcomes of

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pattern. Another solution is that

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teachers should make some efforts to educate youngsters how

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drinks

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are harmful to our health; as tutors can incite adolescents to have

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diet and avoid sugary products in a more effective and strategic manner than their parents. Apart from that, the government should monitor the making process of

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soft

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like soda closely and strict

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are put in place in order to check the quality and the proportion of added flavours and contents.

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, the percentage of added flavours and content should be labelled properly, so that a customer should familiar

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he is inhaling before buying them. To conclude

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, to curb the high

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consumption

of

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, the authorities and schools should make propelling efforts to educate

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and toddlers to minimise the intake of

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drinks

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respectfully. The authorities must keep

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eye on the procedures, qualities and quantity of

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soft

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in order to keep their citizens safe.