Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason some job are better done by men and others by women. do you agree or disagree?

It is said that people should select their career based on their
gender
to perform better in it, as a consequence of
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of male and female. I strongly disagree with
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statement
and the
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reasons
for my position are as follow.
Firstly
,
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women
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a human
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to do every occupation that they want. In fact, everyone
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could select a job and be successful in it by high attempt.
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, some people argue that female
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weak and
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sensitive
to be a police or political
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character
like being a
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president
resident
of a country, while in society can be seen that some
women
are in place of power in those careers and shoulder
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responsibilities
even more than
men
. I think M.s
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Marcel
,
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president
of German would be a good example to reveals the
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strengths
strength
of a woman.
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Secondly
,
men
and
women
complement each other.
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fact that each
gender
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or unique ability, in a workplace better results will be obtained when two sexes
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cooperate
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together
to gather
, due to scientific discoveries. It
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sense
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of balance
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because they think differently and have
speciffic
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specific
methods of
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doing
things.
therefore
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differenses
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differences
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, I feel that we should view them as opportunities for innovation and discovery
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effective work practices. By the way of conclusion, I
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not matter what is your
gender
, both
men
and
women
employees are an asset to any industry and as our stereotypes
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always appropriate, we must not discourage anyone to opt an occupation because of his or her
gender
and
also
a person's
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weakness
weaknesses
would probably be transformed into
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by working with another sex and more endeavour.
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