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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

Migrating to other
countries
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 is a phenomenon that can be rooted
to
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 the very ancient period of human civilisation.
People
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move
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 to other
countries
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 and places for
better
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a better
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life
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, a better environment and better settlement. The number of qualified and skilled
people
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 migrating to developed
countries
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 from comparatively poor
countries
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 is increasing rapidly and some
people
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 think that it is a natural human tendency to settle in a better environment rather than to stay in their
home
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country
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.
On the contrary
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 other groups of
people
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 find it hard to accept that it is a natural trend and criticise the rich
nations
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 for the brain drain. I believe that rich
countries
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 to some extent allure talented
individuals
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 to settle there but mostly it is decided by
individuals
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 and it is a natural movement by talented
people
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.
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 with, the
life
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 standard, security, career growth, political environment, research facilities and many other aspects of a better
life
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 in rich
countries
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 are far better than the poor
nations
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.
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 why capable
individuals
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 who might contribute to a great extent for a
country
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 are often allured by the rich
nations
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 to
move
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 and work there. The brain drain system that mainly attracts talented
professionals
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 to settle in rich
nations
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 could not be denied. According to
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recent statistics, more than 10
percent
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per cent
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talented
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of talented
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individuals
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 from Asian
countries
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 are permanently living and working in
countries
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 like the USA, the UK, Australia, Canada and Sweden. Rich
nations
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 have many large and
world known
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world-known
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 organisations that hunt for
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talented
people
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 who are in IT, engineering, medicine or in other similar professions from poor
nations
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 and encourage them to contribute
for
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to
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 their
countries
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. Because of
this
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 talent hunt or more specifically brain drain system many poor
nations
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 are suffering from the scarcity of talented
professionals
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. These
individuals
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 were supported and financed by the poor
countries
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 and when the time has come to repay and show patriotism, they are working for the development of rich
nations
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.
From
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this
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regards
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, some
people
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 accept that the rich
countries
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 are actually stealing capable
professionals
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 from poor
nations
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. But it can be easily understood that no rich
nation
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 can force a talented individual to migrate there and that’s why it is a decision taken by a person. Skilled
professionals
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 and workers are migrating to rich
nations
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 to have a better
life
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 and better salary. They can easily compare the
life
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 and career prospect their
home
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country
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 would offer with the opportunity they will get if they
move
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 to a rich
nation
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. Should not poor
nations
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 provide better facilities for those gifted and skilled
people
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 to work at
home
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country
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 and ensure
better
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a better
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 lifestyle?
The political
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 instability, insecurity, discrimination in
workplace
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the workplace
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 are three major reasons
people
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move
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 to a rich
nation
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. Again, rich
nations
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 are not only giving the opportunity to talented
individuals
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,
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they are
also
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 allowing students,
labours
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but labours also
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 refuses, minors and family members of workers. So from
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, we can’t blame them that they are stealing talents from poor
nations
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. Moving to a better
place
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 has always been a natural trend throughout the very beginning of human existence.
People
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 always moved from one
place
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 to another to get a better
place
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 to live in. Moving to a better
place
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 is a tendency we have inherited from our forefathers. Many skilled
professionals
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 through work in rich
nations
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 do not forget their
home
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countries
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 in most cases. They are the primary revenue earners for poor
nations
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 and from
this
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regards
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, they are contributing towards the development of a poor
country
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. It is often seen that a middle-aged skilled professional often come back to his
home
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country
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 and contribute even more from the experience he has gathered through working in a rich
nation
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. In conclusion, migrating to rich
nations
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 is a natural trend for expert
professionals
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, which are mostly their own choices for better and secured
life
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 rather than the rich
nations
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’ advertised temptation for them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Globalization
  • Skilled workforce
  • Socioeconomic growth
  • Economic disparity
  • Specialist areas
  • Free market of skills
  • Immigration policies
  • Labor market
  • Talent attraction
  • Professional development
  • Remittances
  • Economic incentives
  • Knowledge transfer
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