Directors and managers of organizations are often older people. Some people say that it is better for younger people to be leaders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a common situation in companies most vital positions like CEO and managers has been taken by the

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, some

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argue that if

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being

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in charge

, it will lead the

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statement

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explain

why. There are several factors to support my point of view.

First

of all, I believe young

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has bigger ambition and vision on they are career, it has

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beneficial

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people

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gold and nothing can stop them to achieve their aim and vision. If they had

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the important position in the

company

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leave with their big ambition and vision.

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converted

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the young

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have more abilities to lead the organization better

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because most of the young

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they had the up-to-date knowledge they

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trained

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by the new education system.

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, they can

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adapt

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the

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issues

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nowadays.

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, they can use the internet to promote the organization

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increase the value of the organization., which the older

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would not be able to do

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this

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, compared to the

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the young

people

have more energy which

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they are able to work longer and much

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efficiency

than the siner

people

. And

also

, as they are more dynamic

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makes the business working atmosphere

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than the older

people

leading if they were given the leder or manager job. To sum up,

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due

to the young

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has bigger ambition, up-to-date education and better energy to lead the

company

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forward

toward

to the better future, I believe that the young

people

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the best suit the vital position

such

as leader and manager even the CEO.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? ive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own nowledge or experience.

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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the worker more. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Many people believe that education and high qualification will bring success. Others think that it is not required to achieve success in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.