Directors and managers of organizations are often older people. Some people say that it is better for younger people to be leaders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a common situation in companies most vital positions like CEO and managers has been taken by the
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singer
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, some
people
argue that if
this
situation could change to the young
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being
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in charge
, it will lead the
company
to have better
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the
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statement
and going to
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explain
why. There are several factors to support my point of view.
First
of all, I believe young
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generation
has bigger ambition and vision on they are career, it has
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beneficial
for the
company
future,
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because
they are young and has lest afraid than the older
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people
. They will
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gold and nothing can stop them to achieve their aim and vision. If they had
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the important position in the
company
, they would help the
company
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other
leave with their big ambition and vision.
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,
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converted
to the older
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the young
people
have more abilities to lead the organization better
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because most of the young
people
they had the up-to-date knowledge they
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trained
tried
by the new education system.
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, they can
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the
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issues
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nowadays.
For instance
, they can use the internet to promote the organization
thus
increase the value of the organization., which the older
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generations
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this
.
Moreover
, compared to the
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singer
people
the young
people
have more energy which
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they are able to work longer and much
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efficiency
than the siner
people
. And
also
, as they are more dynamic
thus
makes the business working atmosphere
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than the older
people
leading if they were given the leder or manager job. To sum up,
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due
to the young
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generation
has bigger ambition, up-to-date education and better energy to lead the
company
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forward
toward
to the better future, I believe that the young
people
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the best suit the vital position
such
as leader and manager even the CEO.
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