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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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Dear Emma,
I’m
 just writing to say
I’m
 so sorry that I haven’t returned the IELTS
book
 to you yet since I have borrowed it in
last
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 three months. The thing is,
it
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I
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 had some problems with
this
book
 which made me want to cry. To be honest, I feel very guilty that I haven’t
send
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 you an email earlier. These days
I’m
 very busy
at
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 my study and work. Today, I need to tell you that the
book
 was damaged accidentally when I went to travel with
the
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 sister. Again,
I’m
 apology for
this
. What happened is that I
brough
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brought
bought
 the
book
 to the swimming pool area when the sister asked me
joined
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 her. While I was walking beside the edge of the pool, I dropped it into the water. All pages were wet and torn apart. Once
this
 happened, I tried to find the website where I could buy the new
book
 for you. As I knew, it’s a limited edition IELTS
book
 which was only one online bookstore
sold
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this
 around the world. Luckily, I found the store link and ordered it
last
 night. Anyway, I’ll send the new
book
 to your home address as soon as the order’s arrived
my
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 apartment. I hope you can forgive me for
this
 situation. Best wishes, Jameekorn
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